I was listening to the special guest. He told us about his mate and him. His muscles were big as a tree. He told us that he carried giant rocks that were very heavy. His message to us was to follow our dreams just like he did.
When Levi from Mitre 10 Mega was going to leave room 2 got to have a picture of Levi with Room 2.
Then when he left we all said goodbye to Levi.
ReplyDeleteChris Thurlow28 October 2012 16:57
Hi Sydney,
On your draft writing it was pleasing to see that you and a partner attempted to edit your writing. There is good use of a comparison between Levi’s muscles and a tree.
Next Step: I would have mention earlier in the recount who the guest was. I feel that could have express more of your own feelings throughout the recount to help the reader understand the mood you were in
Mr Thurlow
To you I like your stath and your calring in too.it is cool and you are cool to and britey
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